Draft 1
Front Cover
Audience Feedback - What I need to change:
- Fizzy Pop looks too edited
- Pictures are not blended well, one is more contrasted then other, should be equal
-bar code is not conventionally near title
-title is usually in top left hand corner
-too much white spaced
-title needs to stand out more
Draft 2
Front Cover
Audience Feedback - What I need to change:
- stars don't really go well, look random
- picture goes well with caption but it shouldn't be front cover image
-bar code is not conventionally near title
-title doesn't stand out
-it doesn't look like a professional magazine
-needs more story lines to grab readers attention
Draft 3
Front Cover
Audience Feedback - What I need to change:
- too many bright colours
- the editing of the picture doesn't go well with bright colours - washes out the picture completely
-it looks plain
-there is nothing which grabs attention such as splash
-picture doesn't stand out - could use comic strip effect - make it look 3D (suggestions)
-needs more story lines to grab readers attention
Draft 4
Front Cover
Audience Feedback - What I need to change:
- Too many bright colours
- Main picture and article don't stand out - needs more basic editing
-bar code is not conventionally near title
-pictures need more balance, one is brighter then the other
-splash doesn't stand out
-the blurry effect of background doesn't look professional
Draft 5
Front Cover
Audience Feedback - What I need to change:
- Image doesn't grab readers attention - doesn't have confident stance - needs to be close up and more eye contact for example
- the image in bottom left hand corner doesn't have same basic editing as main image - needs to be similiar to look professional
- website font is too big
-needs a splash or something to grab attention
-less editing on main image
-title doesn't need a selling line
Contents Page
Audience Feedback - What I need to change:
- Too much white space
- All images have different editing and don't look like professional images
-looks too confusing
-there is nothing that really stands out
-lack of house style - only 'radar' uses continuity of pink which is on front page
-needs more of a format and layout
Double Page Spread
Audience Feedback - What I need to change:
- It really needs 3 or 4 columns
- Main image doesnt stand out especially against the huge 'LCD'
-text may be a little too small
-can't see feet of image
-maybe more colour and use of house style
-anchorage needed
Front Cover
Draft 6
Audience Feedback - What I need to change:
- Too much white space
- Main image doesn't stand out
- Splash doesn't remotely stand out
-editing of photographs don't match
-looks too confusing - needs more of a layout
- Doesn't need 'the' or 'magazine' near title
Double Page Spread
Audience Feedback - What I need to change:
- It really needs 3 or 4 columns
- Main image should look more confident, she looks reserved, doesn't stand out
-text may be a little too small
-can't see entire feet of image
- use of the pink in house style
-anchorage needed
Contents page
Audience Feedback - What I need to change:
- Too much white space
- Images don't look professional
-not much layout and looks confusing
- 'issue 569' overlaps 'this week'
- 'radar' doesnt stand out
- needs more use of house style colours
